Jack and Red - editing manuscript

It's very cold this morning (-7 ) so I think a short walk is enough I just walked the half mile to the Mana Cafe. It was rather empty early so I could sit wherever I wanted.

Snowy tracks.

I've been working on the first edit to this manuscript. It takes longer to edit this than it did to write it. The first part needs the voice changed and some clean-up on the action. Most of the conversation I can keep, I think.

I'm not sure it it moves along fast enough. I'll have to save that for the second edit - for now.